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Heather Baskins
Cline
English 102
September 14, 2011

The Language of ‘Windigo’

‘Windigo’ is a poem by Louise Erdrich. The language of the poem leads a reader on a journey of mystery, fear, wonderment, and in the end relief. By analyzing the language used in ‘Windigo’ the following forms of language are identified; personification, connotation, simile, and descriptive language.

To begin with, the poem opens with the main character that is a monster or creature of sorts, speaking to a child. He says, “You knew I was coming for you, little one, when the kettle jumped in the fire (Windigo, first line, first verse).” The author uses language to describe the kettle jumping into the fire. Giving this human characteristic to a kettle, which is an object, is a form of personification in language terms. The author was giving a human trait to an object that cannot jump or move by itself. By using personification the author helps the reader to be placed in the story and visualize that action immediately in the poem.

A further example of personification in ‘Windigo’ is in the fourth verse where the author states, “from the bushes we passed, until they stood, naked (Windigo, third and fourth line, fourth verse).” By describing the bushes as naked the author personifies them, and the reader is able to picture what a naked or bare hush would resemble. Once again the author helps the reader create a mental picture while reading the poem and place himself or herself directly in the story or description.

The next form of language the author uses in ‘Windigo’ is connotation. Connotation, easily defined is when a word is read; the reader automatically defines or relates it to a term or another reference. An example could be the word toddler; a reader automatically thinks small child, almost infant, bobbling along walking or running, young child. In ‘Windigo’ the author uses connotation in the second verse, “Mother scolded the food warm and smooth in the pot and called you to eat (Windigo, second line, second verse).” Placing the word mother and scolded together is a form of connotation. A mother is usually likened to the same qualities or traits in a mental image- nurturing, caregiver, domestic, even disciplinarian or a scolder could be used. This example of connotation helps the reader to picture a mother hard at work insisting the food cook and almost disciplining it in a way to cook and be ready for her family to eat.

Another form of language used in ‘Windigo’ is simile. Simile is when an author compares two things using the word ‘like’ or ‘as’ in the descriptive. In ‘Windigo’ this is done in the fourth verse, “Naked, spread like the cleaned spines of fish (Windigo, fourth line, fourth verse).” When something is naked and spread or bear boned it could be compared to the spines of fish. When fish bones are clean and bare of anything it’s an excellent way to describe what the author is trying to say, that the bushes while the creature is running with the child in its arms were bare and naked with not a leaf left on them. Using simile was a way to once again place the reader in the story and create a mental image and relate to the situation being described.

The final form of language used in ‘Windigo’ is descriptive language. This is the form with the most examples to share from the poem and the most successful for placing a reader in the poem or story. The first example from the first verse, “towels flapped on the hooks, and the dog crept off, groaning” helps the reader picture a breeze or wind causing the towels to flap and possibly carrying the creature’s scent along with it to make him creep away groaning (Windigo, third and fourth line, first verse). A reader can see the towels flapping in their mind and hear that familiar sound of a dog groaning out of fear or possessiveness from an intruder or stranger. At the start, this descriptive text places the reader in the poem and creates a mental image that is identifiable and easy to connect with.

A further example of descriptive language in ‘Windigo’ is in the third verse, “Copper burned in the raw wood. You saw me drag toward you (Windigo, second and third line, third verse).” Picturing a copper pot burning or scorching on a fire is easy to see in the mind’s eye and the author creates this image with the descriptive text. Also, having a monster or creature “drag” towards the child is an easy mental image. This aids the reader in picturing this creature on the ground, laying down and coming slowly in a dragging position towards the child. This descriptive text leads the reader to begin questioning what is this creature, where did it come from and what does it want?

A final example of the descriptive language in ‘Windigo’ from the fourth verse is, “Steam rolled from my wintry arms (Windigo, second line, fourth verse).” A reader can picture what steam looks like coming off of a hot furry body in cold temperatures. This descriptive language leads the reader to create more of the mental image of what this hairy or furry creature is as it crawled and picked up the child in his hot steamy arms.

In conclusion, the language forms of personification, connotation, simile and descriptive language are used in the poem ‘Windigo.’ The author succeeded in describing an object with human traits, using a term with another word that was easily relatable, compared two words using the word ‘like’ and describes ordinary things in a way that conjured a clear mental image. The author used these language forms in a way that assisted the reader in forming a relatable image in their mind to further the progression of the poem and wonder about the identity of the creature and his surroundings.

Works Cited
Windigo. Erdrich, Louis. 9/11 Internet:
http://poetry365.tumblr.com/post/692283573/windigo-louise-erdrich